tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31167603.post3757121799603827647..comments2023-05-15T03:35:02.849-07:00Comments on GajabKhopdi: First Love!GajabKhopdihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16901761222312719098noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31167603.post-37112970137817290172007-05-21T04:03:00.000-07:002007-05-21T04:03:00.000-07:00A satisfactory peice of work. but i think probably...A satisfactory peice of work. but i think probably u r too young to deal with a mature subject like this.. I personally appreciate Vinod's commments n genuinly feel tht u need to grow up on this topic.. Anyways English part is ok.. except for a few grammar mistakes.. but again they can b ignored to maintain the continuity.<BR/><BR/>Here full marks to Vinod..Yippyy:)monika guptahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08276019295850667362noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31167603.post-14560787961933975952007-04-07T09:08:00.000-07:002007-04-07T09:08:00.000-07:00No inspiration really............just aise hi a th...No inspiration really............just aise hi a theme came to mind and i framed a story around it.... :)GajabKhopdihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16901761222312719098noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31167603.post-89605030366167541312007-04-03T10:49:00.000-07:002007-04-03T10:49:00.000-07:00Besides, any inspiration behind this story of your...Besides, any inspiration behind this story of yours?Chintan Agarwalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06814334717822763335noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31167603.post-53711293184496924262007-03-30T05:29:00.000-07:002007-03-30T05:29:00.000-07:00That was a touching story(really!) and very poetic...That was a touching story(really!) and very poetic too. I guess you would do well to take Vinod's directions on extending the son's role further. I would love to read a story with that analogy. But then the story was amazing as it is. In fact, I found the dichotomy rather appealing.Chintan Agarwalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06814334717822763335noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31167603.post-4165861608228644252007-03-29T06:59:00.000-07:002007-03-29T06:59:00.000-07:00A very well executed peice. There were portions th...A very well executed peice. There were portions that I absolutely loved. For example, the part about the tear falling on his hand. Very poetic. But of course, you've always been the poetic kind. You have a very strong command over language. The story moves smoothly, without any jerks. I like it. <BR/><BR/>Sometimes, you vocabulary backfires. For example, "Oh God, how mendacious you boys turn out Vinod Kharehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05329996665270601782noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31167603.post-29172149561367612882007-03-28T09:52:00.000-07:002007-03-28T09:52:00.000-07:00waah, tum kab se yeh bhasha bolne lage beta?senti ...waah, tum kab se yeh bhasha bolne lage beta?<BR/>senti hai, par short hai. feelings are present but as saplings, express them more eloquently, let them grow on the story.Aneeshhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11915533419372668176noreply@blogger.com